Query Letter Review

for Fiction Writers

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Pitch Perfect

and get noticed

Let’s set your book up for success

You’ve been through draft after draft of your manuscript and polished your prose, and now you’re ready to see your book on store shelves. But there’s one crucial thing your manuscript needs: a well-written query letter. 

The query letter is your gateway to traditional publishing—the one-chance pitch that entices a literary agent to request your beloved manuscript and start reading. 

To put your best foot forward, you need to write a query letter that stands out, follows a specific format, and impresses and intrigues an agent. (No small feat, I know!)  

When you’ve already invested so much of yourself in your book, it can be tempting to think that the work speaks for itself. But you’ve come too far to sell your work short by sending a query letter that’s not the best possible reflection of your book.

I’m here to walk you through it.

For your book to be traditionally published, you need to write a compelling query letter. There’s just no way around it, and it requires you to think about your book in a different way. Your book is a creative work of art, yes, but to a literary agent, it is also a product to be sold.

Most writers I work with are wrestling with one (or more) of these concerns:

“How can I possibly summarize my entire novel in one page?”

You’ve spent months (or years) building a rich, layered story. Distilling it to a few hundred words can feel overwhelming, even impossible. I’ll help you identify the true spine of your story and shape a pitch that captures both the plot and the emotional stakes, so your query feels focused, compelling, and true to your book.

“What if my query sounds flat, even though my book isn’t?”

A common fear—and a valid one. A query letter is a different skill than writing a novel, and many strong manuscripts are held back by pitches that don’t fully convey their appeal. I’ll help you sharpen your hook, elevate your language, and bring the energy of your story onto the page.

“I’ve revised this so many times…I can’t tell what’s working anymore.”

When you’re too close to your own query letter, it’s challenging to see it clearly. (As a writer myself, I know!) I offer thoughtful, objective feedback that cuts through the noise, so you can move forward with clarity and confidence.

“I’m worried about getting it wrong and ruining my chances.”

Querying can feel high-stakes because, in many ways, it is. You don’t need perfection, but you do need a query that puts your book its best possible light. I’ll help you avoid common pitfalls and position your work professionally, so you can query with confidence instead of second-guessing every sentence.

And if writing your query letter feels harder than writing the book itself, you’re not doing anything wrong. You’re stepping into a different kind of writing—and I’m here to help.

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Query letter review

A captivating query letter is what unlocks the process of getting your book published.

When you work with me as your query letter editor, you’ll receive extensive notes within your document that break down the key elements of your letter—pitch, comps, bio, and hook—along with revision suggestions and clear next steps. My query letter review isn’t a one-and-done process. After you receive my feedback, you can revise your letter and resubmit for a second pass.

A query letter review is:

—> a professional look at your letter with an eye toward what agents and editors respond to, so you can revise with clarity and direction, not guesswork.

A query letter review isn’t:

—> a promise of publication, but a strategic step toward giving your book the strongest possible introduction.

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Here’s how it works

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Review

I’ll read your query letter with a professional, industry-aware lens. As I go, I’ll leave thoughtful margin comments—highlighting where your pitch is working, where it may be falling short, and where there’s an opportunity to strengthen clarity, stakes, or structure. (Because knowing what to keep is just as important as knowing what to change.)

1)


First-Round Feedback

You’ll receive clear, actionable feedback focused on the big-picture elements so you know exactly what to revise and why.

2)


Revise and resubmit

Once you’ve had time to revise, you’ll send your updated query back to me. This step gives you the space to apply the feedback and refine your letter with intention.

3)


Second-Round Feedback

I’ll review your revision closely, offering additional suggestions while also zooming in on line-level clarity, phrasing, and polish, so your final query feels sharp, confident, and ready to send.

4)

Confident, Clear, Ready to submit…

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After we polish your query letter, you’ll feel confident pressing send to your A-list Agents.

Instead of wondering what to say about your book, you’ll know that you’re presenting your story with intention and strategy .

No more closing your eyes when you click the submit button or crossing your fingers, hoping an agent will see a diamond in the rough. (I know, I’ve been there!)

You’ll leave this process with a sense of optimism that you’re putting your best foot forward. My feedback is designed to show off your story’s unique hook your story in a unique way while give you language you can carry with you—into pitches, conversations, and future projects.

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Just a few of the authors

who make it all worthwhile…

Jackie’s feedback on my query letter was indispensable. Her comments and thoughts were constructive but encouraging. Ultimately, she helped shape my letter into something I can feel proud to submit to agents. I would absolutely recommend her to anyone! 

-Emily B.

I hired Jackie to help me with my query letter and synopsis so I would feel more confident about the querying process. She not only completed the work very quickly, but also gave very straightforward, actionable advice to improve what I had. I really appreciated that her offer included a second pass after making changes, and her second review was as thorough and thoughtful as the first. Her extensive industry experience made me feel I was in good hands. I'd definitely hire her again.

-Gina O.

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When we work together,

my goal is to help you feel

confident and proud

to submit your query letter.

Hello there, I’m Jackie…

the editor who can help you polish your query letter.

A strong query letter requires a different mind set than writing a novel or memoir, so it’s no wonder so many writers struggle with the process. It also requires a certain amount of distance from your own work, and that’s where I come in.

My approach combines professional, industry-aware feedback with thoughtful encouragement. I’m here to help you refine your pitch, clarify your story, and feel genuinely confident pressing “send.”

You’ll come away with a clear, actionable feedback that strengthens your pitch while preserving your voice.

I’m here for your questions!

No question is too

big or too small!

Let’s do this!

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